17a - Elevator Pitch 2



17a - Elevator Pitch 2 


Link to the new pitch - https://drive.google.com/open?id=11L6FqrHRraefPq8a54cvWBsGYZknOX9M 

The thing that stood out most about the feedback was how important the stats were at the beginning of the intro, so I decided to keep it the same for this pitch. Other than that, I thought there was some good feedback on the order of the pitch where it goes intro/statistics, coming up with a scenario where the product would be useful and then describing how the product would make life easier. Overall I kept a lot the same, but with a few minor presentation and word changes.

Comments

  1. CarlMarch 20, 2020 at 2:44 PM

    What's up Marcus,

    I agree, having the stats in the beginning definitely sets a great introduction and is also a great hook when revealing your idea. That is something that grabs people's attention right away. It is noticeable how you took the feedback to heart, and adjusted the order of what you had to say. Great job.

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  2. Janine SantiagoMarch 20, 2020 at 4:04 PM

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  3. Janine SantiagoMarch 20, 2020 at 4:05 PM

    Hi Marcus, great pitch! I remember commenting on your last pitch about the efficiency of the stats, so I am glad you kept that element as your attention-getter. I think you did a good job of identifying what feedback was useful to you and adjusting. In my second pitch, I also made some word changes, and another thing I would suggest you look at improving is your “eye contact” with whoever you are presenting to.

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